"Show me how you do that trick, the one that makes me scream." She said.

Yes, show me because I can actually experience what you want me to, instead of hearing about it. The Cure promises "Show me how you do it and I promise you, I promise that I'll run away with you. I'll run away with you."
 
(Drawing by Zoe)

Show, don't tell. It's how to get our readers to run away with us in our story. It's also beat in our little writer brains. Even though we all work hard to show, sometimes we slip and tell. No matter how many articles I read about how to show and not tell I find it hard to verbalize in a single sentence or phrase to help me remember and stay focused. Heidi Thomas over at Blood Red Pencil did an interview with editor BarbaraWarren with Blue Mountain Editorial Service. One of the questions Barbara answered summed up Show vs Tell for me in a simple answer.
What are the major mistakes you look for when editing a manuscript?
One big mistake is to tell the story instead of showing it through dialogue and action. It’s the difference between someone telling you what happened yesterday and you being present when it actually happened.
Someone telling you versus you actually being present.  Ah yes!  Finally a post-it note reminder that I can use every time I edit that can get my writing where it needs to be.  So how about you, what gets you there?  Ahem...in your writing of course.


I thought to apologize for the risky photo...but I can't.  I love it.